新航道上海學校雅思頻道小編第一時間帶來分享每次雅思考試大作文范文及解析，希望對各位備考考生們有所幫助，對雅思寫作有所提高!本文是2020年11月12日雅思大作文范文及解析：競爭力是好還是壞?

  2020年11月12日雅思大作文題目

  Competitiveness is considered to be an important quality for people in many societies.

  How does it affect individuals?

  Is it a positive or negative trend?

  高分范文及解析

  01

  Being competitive is an arguably desirable quality. It could go either way on both the individual level and the level of society.

  解析

  * 開頭段落可以三言兩語就結束，有話留到body部分扯。

  * 遣詞的時候，不要過度思考，意思到了就可以，加速寫作過程，思考也留到body部分。

  * 造句的時候，不要貪戀長，還是那個原則：時間和腦力留在body部分用。

  02

  In the good way, competitiveness evokes one’s yearning for wealth and fame. Being competitive, the one is strong-willed, conscientious and resilient, thus having the traits crucial to achieving success. Also, the individual may be charismatic because he or she can imbue people with enthusiasm and energy. On the other hand, things may go the other way: not only does it plague an individual with desires that are beyond his or her ability, being competitive may also be unfavorable for having a rapport with other people. People usually prefer an amiable colleague or classmate, who is considered approachable and relaxing, and they are probably estranged from a competitive individual, who may be considered unfriendly and stressful.

  解析

  * body部分的第一段回應第一個問題。

  * 遣詞：動詞和形容詞是核心。本段中值得琢磨的詞被標注出來了，看看是不是主要是動詞和形容詞。這兩類詞的表意功能(描述或評價)最強，是用詞方面的關鍵。

  * 造句：句子形式的多樣，主要狀語的多樣性(動詞分詞的前置或后置狀語、狀語從句)來實現。當然，也會有一個兩個特殊句型(比如：倒裝)。當然，也有定語的多樣形式(從句、短語后置)。

  * 文脈：因為在開頭段落講到的兩種情況(It could go either way)，所以本段的結構就可以很簡單：分別討論兩種情況即可。注意：In the good way和On the other hand這兩個短語很重要。它們是提示讀者本段落的內容的切分的。這是常說的“邏輯連接詞”，是評分的關鍵點之一。

  03

  Same as it is to an individual, competitiveness, on the scale of a society, can also be both advantageous and disadvantageous. On one hand, a society may therefore nurture a courageous and aspiring nation that may conquer any hardship. The Chinese are such a nation, a nation that never yields to any difficulties. Being competitive has got them out of so many predicaments throughout history. On the other hand, if competitiveness goes the other way and becomes excess. There can hardly be altruism in a society, and, instead, as to win is every individual’s only purpose, a society can be apathetic or even aggressive.

  解析

  * body部分的第二段回應第二個問題。

  * 遣詞：原則和道理同上一段。提醒注意：不要在沒有評價或者描述的地方費腦筋用詞。你以為考官會在意那些地方的詞么?極大概率不會。

  * 造句：原則和道理同上一段。本段中，狀語又有了與上一段不一樣的形式(形容詞短語前置、介賓短語插入)。

  * 文脈：本段同樣分別討論兩種情況即可。注意：On one hand和On the other hand這兩個短語很重要。更重要的是，本段的第一句是用來銜接本段和上一段的，那么Same as it is to an individual 這個短語就很重要：在結構和內容上起到串聯上下文的作用，在語法現象上是狀語的一種形式。

  04

  An individual can be driven by the desire to win and make accomplishments, or the individual gets trapped in the mindset and loses his or her calm. Likewise, this dichotomy also applies to societies.

  解析

  * 結尾段落也可以三言兩語就結束，籠統回應body部分提及的內容即可，避免啰嗦。