新航道上海學校雅思頻道小編第一時間帶來分享每次雅思考試大作文范文及解析，希望對各位備考考生們有所幫助，對雅思寫作有所提高!本文是2020年11月21日雅思大作文范文及解析：十八歲之前，必須要接受全日制教育嗎?

  2020年11月21日 雅思大作文題目

  Young people should be required to have full-time education before the age of eighteen.

  To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

  【寫在開始寫作之前】

  最近三場的雅思寫作大作文的話題其實都比較抽象。給人感覺是：

  我國國民早已具備的素質(competitiveness)怎么還要討論?

  我國國民正在實現的目標(the environment)怎么還會疑惑?

  我國國民基本以及習以為常的情況(full-time education until the age of eighteen)怎么還有顧慮?

  這些“理所當然”的情況反而不好討論吧。畢竟，當我們太先進，能夠體諒他人的疾苦也是一種素質。

  高分范文及解析

  01

  In many countries, an individual must attend full-time education until some point of his or her adolescence. The point may be sixteen years of age. Does it need to be a bit later, say, eighteen? The answer may not be globally universal.

  解析

  * 三言兩語、直截了當的開頭段落是必要的。起碼雅思考官們，苦于要頻繁閱讀大量的英語使用不熟練者的作文，沒有耐心看婆婆媽媽、磨磨蹭蹭的開頭段落。

  * 設問是常用的一個寫作筆法，簡單易學，趕緊學會。

  * 還是那句話：開頭段落的遣詞造句真的不要過分講究，措辭準確，表意清晰就好。

  02

  1) The proposal is based on the legally nominated age, worldwide, at which adulthood starts.

  2) The underlying idea is that one, at the age of eighteen, is more or less ready to join the community – largely its workforce, and to participate in many activities, for example, voting – excising a constituent’s right that is most valued by the government.

  3) Not a government conspiracy, education is actually designed to serve the purposes, and to fulfill its missions, education needs to guarantee that individuals are competent or qualified for their roles.

  4) Eighteen years of enlightenment, training, cultivation and edification that are constant and focused, without any disturbing matters, may be the well-calculated span of time and intensity that are believed to be most likely to successfully prepare individuals for their roles in the community.

  5) For this reason, it is plausible to have non-optional full-time education till the age of eighteen.

  解析

  * 這個段落故意被一句一句拆分開來，大家可以發現：句子的長短是不一樣的。有長有短是寫作的必要手法。句子長度趨同的時候，節奏單調，讀者(考官)很累的。你不照顧ta們的閱讀感受，ta們就對你的分數不客氣。

  * 主體段落總要有一個兩個長難句(第二句和第四句)的設計。

  03

  Yet, things are not as simple as the rationale; otherwise, we would not be discussing the age as a proposition but celebrating an accomplishment. In many countries, full-time education until the age of eighteen is still an ideal that the authority is making tremendous endeavors to achieve. The difficulties are the shortage of labor, due to which the government has to make young individuals usable labor at their premature ages, and the lack of money to sponsor full-time education that is available to the public and spans almost two decades. In those countries, some leeway should be allowed, and a couple of years earlier than eighteen may be acceptable for now.

  解析

  * 有沒有找到這一段落的長難句?

  * 發現寫主體部分段落的套路：在頭尾的句子偏短，在中間部分的句子偏長。因為引入和閉環的句子在段落的頭尾，討論的細節和核心在段落的中間。

  * 有沒有發現虛擬語氣的使用?真的在寫作中用不到虛擬語氣么?

  04

  Overall, eighteen years is a desirable length of full-time education, and where conditions allow this arrangement, the time and intensity should be guaranteed. Since many countries are not yet able to afford the eighteen-year long span, we should use some patience.

  解析

  * 結尾段落處不貪戀篇幅也不要過分動腦，于是留給結尾段落的時間可以不要慷慨：不做內容上的復雜思考，只是回顧主體部分的內容。